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--- dog-story-scott [2021/06/24 18:32] – steve.wang
+++ dog-story-scott [2021/06/27 17:49] (current) – brendon.chang
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-=====Selling point1(how he lost a leg)=====
+===Part 1===
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-One day, I walked through the forest. While walking back home, I saw 2 or 3 dogs on the street.
+One day, I walked through the forest. While walking back home, I saw 2 or 3 dogs on the street. I had seen these dogs in the neighborhood before, they were big and strong and liked to bully other dogs.
 一天，我穿過森林。在回家的路上，我在街上看到了兩三隻狗。
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-When our eyes met, I thought. “What are they going to do?” I felt that they were going to jump on me.
+When our eyes met, I thought, “What are they going to do?” I felt that they were going to jump on me.
 當我們的對到眼時，我想: “他們要做什麼？”，我覺得他們要撲向我。
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-I looked at them carefully and thought "Who are they?".
+I looked at them carefully and thought, "Who are they?".
 我盯著他們，心想: “他們是誰？”。
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-When suddenly one of them jumped on me.
+Then, suddenly one of them jumped on me.
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-After struggling and fighting, I finally escaped.
+After struggling and fighting, I finally escaped. My leg got bitten during the fight.
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-=====Selling point2(met the human)=====
+===Part 2===
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-Suddenly I saw a cute little dog, but I was afraid that it was one of the bad dogs.
+Suddenly I saw a cute little dog, but I was afraid that it was a member of the bad dog group.
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-I ran as fast as I could and left the place. When I looked to my right side, I saw a human standing in front of me.
+I ran as fast as I could and left the place. When I looked to my right side, I saw a human standing right next of me.
 我迅速地離開現場。這時當我往右邊一看，發現那裡站著一個人。
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-My leg was cured by this man, I am very thankful to him.
+This man took me and helped me. My leg was cured by this man, I was very thankful to him.
 我的腿被這個人治好了，我很感謝他。
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 這個地方不是很乾淨，但是他們給我的醫療床很軟很舒服。
-=====Selling point3(helping humans)=====
+===Part 3
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-Today I helped that human to carry his bag, don't worry! I'm strong.
+Today I helped that human to carry his bag. Don't worry! I'm now strong and healthy.
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-I helped humans sweep the floor, it was so dirty.
+Now, I help the humans sweep the floor, it is so dirty.
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-Today I'm also working out. I want to run faster if I want to be stronger.
+I'm also working out. I want to run faster if I want to be stronger. I can feel my muscles getting bigger everyday.
 今天我也在鍛煉，如果我想變得更強壯，我必須要繼續練習跑步。
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-It was a nice day, but I'm tired. I want to sleep, good night!
+It is a nice day, but I'm tired. I want to sleep, good night!
 今天是美好的一天，雖然我很累。我要睡覺了，晚安！
-=====Selling point4(protect the humans)=====
+===Part 4===
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-I am protecting a human's house. Those thief dogs will sneak into your house and eat all your meat.
+While I was in the shelter, the humans gave me a job.
-My job is to protect the house from the dogs.
+My job was to protect a human's house. Those thief dogs will sneak into your house and eat all your meat.
+My job was to protect the house from the dogs.
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-I scared those dog way!
+Whenever they came around, I scared them away!
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-I was happy that they ran away! I must be strong!
+I was happy that I could protect the humans and their food! I must be strong!
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-I watched the dog go home.
+I watched as the bad dogs ran home. I felt really good about myself.
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-After, I got an award, a gold medal from humans. I was super happy that I could be so friendly to them.
+After, I got an award, a gold medal from the humans. I got this medal because I was so good at protecting their houses. I was super happy that I could be so friendly to them.
+I’m still in the shelter now, but I would really like to have my own family to protect.
+Please take me home.
 不久後，人類頒給我一面金牌做為獎勵。我很高興我們能對彼此這般友好。
-[[:adopt-scott| Click here to adopt Scott]]
+Click [[:adopt-scott|here ]]to adopt Scott.